My first story

Discussion in 'Erotic Literature' started by Bowler, Jan 8, 2010.

  1. Bowler

    Bowler New Member

    Jan 4, 2010
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    OK, so this isn't a new one, in fact it's my first ever one.
    I dug it up and refreshed it a bit, as it wasn't as good as any of my more recent works.
    Anyways, hope you enjoy it. :)


    It was a warm day, warmer than usual.
    You had taken to wearing a light flowing skirt, that ended just above your knees, Along with a vest top, to try and keep cool.
    You had been expecting me to call round, around 2, but I decided to surprise you a little earlier.

    I pull up and park just around the corner, so you wouldn't know of my plans until the last second.
    After checking the clock, which read 1pm, I decided to wait a short time, so grabbed a smoke.
    As the time came up to a quarter-past, I decided that it was time.
    I exit the car, and walk up to your house, pausing at the front door.

    Without knocking, I feet under the corner of the doormat until I find your spare key.
    I slip it into my pocket, whilst smiling, then peek into your front window to see where you are.
    I see you leave that room and go into the hallway, so I take a quick glance through your door window, and see you retrieving your vacuum cleaner from an under-stairs cupboard.

    Perfect, this is exactly as I was hoping.

    You proceed to take the cleaner into your front room, plug it in, turn it on, and begin vacuuming.
    Retrieving your key from my pocket, I realise I'm already hard as I quietly, but swiftly, unlock your door and enter.
    Closing your door behind me, I can feel my heartbeat racing.
    I can feel my member straining at the material of my combats, throbbing, aching for you.

    I can hear you vacuuming in your front room, unaware of my presence.
    I take a look round the doorway to see you vacuuming by the couch. My palms start to feel damp as I realise it's go time.
    As I approach you, you sense me there, straighten up, and begin to turn around.
    I hook my right hand around your supple midriff, as I come up behind you, and gently pull you back, so your back is pressed against my chest.

    "Sshhh, don't speak", I whisper into your ear, before lowering my head to kiss your neck and shoulder.
    You can feel my erect phallus pressed against your firm buttocks as I swap the hand on your stomach, the fingers on my right hand brushing under your navel as it moves towards your side, causing your abs to ripple.

    I continue to kiss your neck as my now free right hand glides up your side, whilst my left hand strokes your belly.
    Sliding my right hand up your top to cup one of your pert breasts, I also gently squeeze your nipple between my fingers.
    I can hear your breathing getting heavier, which arouses me even more. Every fibre of my body desires you, yearns for you.
    Moving my hand from your breast, I lightly trail my fingers down past your hips, pausing to give your tight buttock a gentle squeeze, then down to your thigh, lifting your skirt slightly to gain access.

    You moan ever so softly as my fingers feather up and down your inner thigh, whilst my left hand slides up your top to give your other breast the same attention that your first received.
    Whilst allowing my hand to slide a little higher up your skirt, I realise you have no panties on as I trace over the top of your pubic area, and down your other thigh.
    I moan quietly with pleasure at this fact now known.

    My hand moves off your breast, and I roll your nipple between my finger tips whilst gently pulling on it.
    Whilst retracing across your pubic area I allow my fingers to glide a little lower.
    You hold your breath slightly, in anticipation, but I make sure not to touch you there yet.

    My fingers go back to stroking your inner thigh, as my left hand moves across to your other nipple to continue.
    I allow my fingers to slide higher up your thigh, so as they are but a hairs breadth away from your pussy.
    That distance they remain, whilst gently stroking front to back, right at the top of your leg.
    My penis aches, hurts even, begging to be set free as it presses against your ass.
    Mmm, that feels so good.
    We both breathe heavily, in unison, and I let a finger oh so softly brush your pussy lip as I move my hand across your soft silky thigh.
    I feel the sweet dampness on my finger and just have to touch you there.
    No longer can I wait, so as my hand reaches the back of your thigh, I spin it over so my middle finger sweeps through your hot moist pussy, as a finger glides over each lip.

    You moan softly as I gently slip a finger into you, and slowly work it in and out whilst also making small circular movements.
    You feel so slick and silky as I carry on using my digit to pleasure you.
    I move my other hand down your front and brush your stomach softly.

    The fire inside me by this point has become too strong to contain and I just have to be inside you.
    The want, desire, need to enter you is unbearable, so I gently move you slightly towards the couch.
    You recognize the gesture and obey, climbing to kneel on the couch, knees apart, as you grab the backrest.

    I undo my top button and slide my trousers down, whilst simultaneously lifting your skirt up, over your gorgeous ass.
    I move in behind you as you tilt your pelvis forward and back slightly, allowing me full access to you.
    Positioning myself at your entrance, I slide my tip up and down your pussy. You moan softly.
    I take hold of your hips, gently but firmly, and apply just enough pressure for my head to enter you.
    Then, slowly, I enter you. We both moan as I feed my cock into you, inch by inch, savouring the sensation.

    I slide myself nearly all the way out, before thrusting quickly, but smoothly, back fully in you.
    You gasp, and I moan, as I slip back into you fully, helped by your sweet slick juices.
    Holding your hips with both hands as I begin to slowly screw you, I guide you to move back onto me on the upward strokes.
    Stroke after stroke our pelvises reciprocate with maximum penetration. Slowly at first, but rapidly increasing with each thrust.

    Our bodies tingle all over as we moan and groan, continuing to rise in pace steadily.
    You move one hand down squeeze a nipple, whilst keeping the other on the backrest for stability.
    Our pace increases and my balls start gently banging on your clit, whilst our breathing gets faster.
    We carry on, like a freight train, beads of sweat start to run down our face, as we both start getting closer.

    Closer to that feeling of ecstasy, building and building steadily.
    I can smell your sweet scent in the air, making my nostrils and brain twitch.
    We both moan, feeling the release building. And building. Raging inside of us.
    You begin to whimper with every stroke, and your sounds serve to rapidly accelerate me to my own climax.
    We carry on, not letting up pace for a moment, your whimpering getting louder and louder.
    I feel your pussy walls twitch, then convulse upon my cock, causing me to lose control also.
    We slow right down as the waves of pleasure radiate through our entire bodies at the same time.
    Those last few moments, when it feels like our souls touch each other, last for what seems like hours.
    Slowly, they die off, leaving us dripping sweat and breathless.
    I pull out of you and remove my hands from your hips.

    You remain motionless, recovering for a few moments, then turn to look at me.
    I'm gone.
    You wonder where I've gone and are just about to call me when you hear me call from the kitchen;
    "Do you fancy a coffee?".
  2. gphine


    Nice work!
  3. Bowler

    Bowler New Member

    Jan 4, 2010
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    Thank you. :)
    Am glad at least one person appreciates it. :p
  4. HardRocker

    Gold Member

    Sep 24, 2006
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    It's gotten 91 views, Bowler, don't feel too bad. Maybe their fingers are too sticky to type a reply.
  5. FlirtyChick

    Gold Member

    Oct 11, 2007
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    Southeast US

    OMG you can take me from behind like that anytime. My fingers and my pussy are dripping.

    Good work!!!!!

  6. lbushwalker

    Gold Member

    Mar 18, 2006
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    'Stralia Mate!
    Hot...........going to show my G/F this one; she fantasises having something like that done to her.
    This has given me ideas so maybe will I follow the script instead :)
  7. north

    north New Member

    Mar 20, 2010
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    Wow, Bowler! For your first go at writing erotica, that was an incredible feat. My first stories were nothing like this. You write with a careful attention to detail and a passionate sensitivity that is often lacking in stories penned by men. This is what true erotica is all about! More, please!