I wrote this poem two weeks ago and would like some opinions

Discussion in 'Erotic Literature' started by Ieatwomen, Mar 10, 2007.

  1. Ieatwomen

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    An Evening With You.

    Properly positioned the warm moisture draws me in.
    The velvet hugs make me return over and over.
    Nails digging into my shoulders work as radar lock.
    Eyes rolled back tell me I found ground zero.
    Rapid acceleration, muscles firing out of cue.
    Uncontrollable shakes and intimate spasms.
    A chorus of triumphant completion.
    Body collapse hastens final withdrawal.

    I would just like to know what you think
     
  2. Barbwire

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    First off, I want say I LOVE your name! Two thumbs up on that one! :tup :tup

    As far as the poem goes, I liked it, very raw and powerful sounding. If I had a thumb to spare, it would be up. :)
     
  3. Ieatwomen

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    I Love Opinions Well Ones Like Yours:D

    Thank you I am blushing
     
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    ""The velvet hugs make me return over and over"".

    Beautifully poetic....

    :)