I never told my wife about this...

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  1. AZman

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    Many years before I met my wife, I was a friendly neighborhood waterman, delivering 3 tons of water daily. This helped keep me in very good shape. I lived in the middle of my route and many of my 1200 customers knew where I lived. This was never a problem or benifit until one night, when I was calling some customers to remind them to leave their bottles, or payment out for me the next day.

    My last call was to "Monica". She was a very good customer, always returning bottles and paying on time...PLUS she was hot! I found that out when I showed up to deliver and she was home(she was never home before this). She answered the door in a conservative blue one piece bathing suit and said she was doing arobics, so could I please put the bottle on the cooler? I always agree (it's my job), but when she turned around the backside of her suit was ALL strings. She looked nude from behind! She smiled and we talked awhile, her trying to get me to join her in arobics. I really wanted to, but her boyfriend was huge muscular black guy, whom I set the account up with.

    BTW...Monica is also black(could pass as Janet Jacksons sister). I left that day, but always tried to deliver when I saw her lil white p/u truck in the parking lot. She was always polite, but never again was she like that first day, until I called to remind her to leave out the empty bottles. She said on the phone that it was her birthday so "I'm wearing my birthday suit!, and I'm lonely because my boyfriend left me". That got my heart apoundin!
    I forget what we said, but she was asking me what I was wearing, do you have a girlfriend, etc. After a few minutes, I was also naked and we're telling each other that each of us are jerking off (I was). I couldn,t believe I was having phone sex.900 numbers were all the rage in the 1980s. She said she was lonely and I said " we should get together to finish what we started on the phone" She hung up after saying something like "yea, right" in a sarcastic way. I didn,t call her back, but suddenly I felt sorta bad sitting there all dressed up with a boner and nowhere to "go". It was march, so the water is cold in a shower.

    That's what I did, a cold shower, but my boner didn't go away...it got harder. I felt bad, not horny and the hardon was wierd. The doorbell rang, I put a robe on and tied the belt over my boner so it wouldn't show when I answered the door. Girl scouts were selling in the neighborhood and I didn't want to be arrested as a pervert. It was Monica. Naked. On my porch, keys in her hand, smile on her face. I had turned the porch light on and after I took in the vision in front of me, I looked at the rest of my porch. No clothes.
    I could see her footprints in my dew covered lawn, leading from her truck to my door. "Are you gonna let me in?", she said. I stepped aside and waved her in and tried to say something witty, but only grunted...She stepped in and saw my hardon peeking out of thr robe, smiled and whispered "got a beer or something I could suck on?"(until that moment stuff like that only happened in my dreams or porn). I went into the kitchen and opened my last beer, moved to the front room and saw Monica bent over the couch. I could only see her from her feet to her ass. Her feet were apart and between her legs was a shiny, wet PINK pussy! Because she's black, her pussy looked like it was lit from within.

    I've never seen anything like hers anywhere. I put the beer down, dropped my robe, spit on my cock and started putting it in.(I had never even touched her at all before that instant). I put it in real slow, and she tensed up and moaned kinda quiet like. I could feel her cumming on my cock when I was all the way in, but she wasn't making any noise. After her spasms stopped, she sighed real big and started gringing into me. Just as I was gonna cum, she pushed me away and we moved to the love seat. I ate her, and watched her tummy twitch, her breathing increase, and watched as she smiled as I also finger fucked her. As soon as I put a pinky near her ass hole, she pushed my head away and stated she wanted to go to the bedroom.
    I walked backwards down the hall while she massaged my cock. This was heaven! In the bedroom, she wanted the top and always stopped before I could cum. I had never been so horny in my life and I remember begging her to let me cum. I don't remember how long it was but after I came on her tummy, I was totally exausted, and passed out. I woke up to a blow job. My cock was kinda tender and only half hard, when she poked her finger up my ass. It hurt, but made me wanna cum......or pee. In just a few seconds I shot another load. It ended up on her chest, between her tits.

    She smiled, said a joke or something and asked me to join her in the shower. In the shower I really checked her out. Flat stomach, nice round and wide tits, with big nipples and a few little puubs on the edge of each nipple. Her gums were pink, like her pussy. The palms of her hands were a sorta brownjsh-pink. Beautiful dark eyes. Nice skin all over except her feet, which were all calloused up with crooked toes. Very very minor things. She was perfect.

    After the shower I asked her if she wanted to suck on the beer now. She laughed and headed for the door. "Walk me to my car". I reached for my robe and she grabbed my arm. "Take me there like a man". We went to her truck naked. I was shaking from the cold. She started her truck and thanked me for a great birthday gift. I was looking around my street for anyone that could see us. She started giving me head again and I protested briefly, when she again used her finger in my ass. I couldn't stand it but also did not want it to stop! I had already came twice and knew I couldn't cum again. I did. It was fantastic! My knees buckled in pain/pleasure, my eyes were slammed shut and I couldn't breath for a couple of seconds. She left after that and I passed out in bed.

    The next night I went to her apt., stripped naked and knocked on her door. She answered in a real nice outfit fit for a danceclub, saw my boner and smiled. She bent down and sucked me off, again using her magic pain/pleasure finger against my protests and made me cum. Before she closed the door she said" my boyfriend is taking a shower right now, in my bathroom, and we're going out to celebrate my birthday. Bye". I did not make this whole thing sound any good, but that night was fodder for many hot .times with my wife, and she always wanted to know "what got into you".
    I never touched Monica again, but she was a customer for a few more years. 20 yrs later and it still gets me hot.....

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    <Hey, AZman, I edited your paragraphs after I read the posts below about it. Every writer has his own ideas about where to break, but look at how the topic changes slightly between sections. Hope that helps.
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  2. Hot Wheels

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    Good read actually....but if you break it up into paragraphs....its so much easier to read.....:D
     
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    that sounds so great...
     
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    I'm an idiot writer, How do I break it up into paragraphs?
     
  5. Texas_Red

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    Are you still able to edit the original post? If so just use the standard rules for paragraphs, that being they are usually 3 to 5 sentences in length, though can be up to 7 if need be. You basically just want to break it up some. If you'd like I could take a crack at cutting it up in a way that work well.

    Edit: Well, that's a little better. Some white space between paragraphs would make it gold, IMO.
     
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    There ya' go...that's kinda' what I meant.....:D
     
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    A paragraph is like a group of related thoughts, or a concept. One collective little part of the story. It conveys your ideas with less confusion, as the reader can digest the meaning of a paragraph before moving on to the next segment.

    Double space after you get to what you feel is an appropriate break point. Try to make a paragraph at least two sentences or more. After I finish a page, I re-read it all and usually adjust the breaks to make the most sense and help the story flow.
     
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    Nice and succinct. Thanks for adding the spaces too..
     
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    LOL at how this is turning into a discussion about formatting and grammar...

    While we're at it, the punctuation goes on the inside of the quotes, too:

    CORRECT:
    NOT:
    Sorry, couldn't resist. Just wanted to add to the grammar convo... . . . :^)
     
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    Haha, yeah. Good thing it all happens after the story so folks don't get turned off before they have a chance.

    As for quotes I know technically it's right, but it has never made sense to me. The period is the end all be all sentence ending punctuation. Not the quotation mark. I will go as far as editing to make the quote not be the end of the sentence if I can just to not have that happen because I think it's so retarded. Taking it even further, technically a quote is a sentence within a sentence, so not only should there be a period inside, but a period outside as well, to properly "terminate" both sentences. How ya like that eh? :p
     
  11. AZman

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    You guys are great. Those responses were better than anything I woud've thought of. I bet it's wrong to end a sentence with the word "of?" At least I got the quote marks right, right? Still learnin'.............
     
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    SF new slogan: "Come to Sexual Forums! Where not only can you come here to learn more about sex, but get an English refresher course too!" lol

    Great story by the way AZ.
     
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    Or "welcome to sexualforums.com, where we can all speak freely about our sexuality... as long as we use proper grammar."

    If we're gonna have to construct all of our sentences correctly, how come forums don't let you use tab and put spaces at thd beginning of paragraphs? Never got that...
     
  14. HardRocker

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    In the Literature forum, where the OPs are generally interested in writing, if someone seems receptive to tips on anything about grammar or structure, I'm glad to help. Anyone who likes to write probably wants to do as good of a job as possible.