first attempt

Discussion in 'Erotic Literature' started by bluey, Jul 9, 2008.

  1. bluey

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    hi guys!! i'm new ^__^ i'm looking for a bit of feedback on my first attempt :lol
    this letter to my boyfriend (i'm in a faaairly long distance relationship so i write the occasional email when the time difference/my work gets in the way of us meeting on skype) goes from the normal "what i did today" kind of thing i usually write to him, then slips into fantasy about halfway through...what do YOU think? comments and criticism would be very appreciated!!!

    *runs and hides* ^___^
     
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    If that doesn't turn him on, he's dead:lol
     
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    Great teaser story Bluey. Welcome to :sf. Now for the rest of the story when you got home, please.:brow
     
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    heheh :eek: i'm a little ahead of you there~ didnt wanna write a huuuuuge post first time so i held off on posting the second part... i tried writing it from *his* perspective...
    i left it as another cliffhanger though 'cause i'm awful :lol
     
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    OK, are you ;)this big a tease in real life?
     
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    Geez - wish I were going to japan:phat
     
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    Very nice, bluey.
     
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    hey, read this earlier and thought it was really good, i wish i could write stuff that well for my boyfriend..he would love it!!